IELTS insho: shifokor va muhandislar chet elda ishlashi — Band 6.5 va 8

Topshiriq

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Bu "Discuss both views and give your opinion" turi. Uchta ish bajarishingiz kerak: birinchi qarashni yoritish, ikkinchi qarashni yoritish va oʻz fikringizni aniq aytish. Oʻz fikringiz kirishda ham, xulosada ham bir xil boʻlishi shart. Oʻzbekistonda bu mavzu juda dolzarb, shuning uchun shaxsiy misollar koʻp keladi, lekin ularni umumiy darajada, ishonchli dalillar bilan keltiring.

Nega 6.5, 7 emas

• Qoliplashgan kirish. "In this essay I will discuss both views and give my opinion." — bu savolning takrori, examiner uchun foydasiz. Oʻrniga mavzuning mohiyatini bering: "The migration of skilled professionals has become a contentious issue."
• Oddiy argumentlar. "We live in a free world and everybody has the right to look for a better life." Bu toʻgʻri, ammo juda umumiy. Band 8 variantida: "compelling them to remain at home infringes upon a basic personal freedom".
• Soʻz boyligi chegaralangan. "a lot of money", "serious shortage", "bad for the society" — qabul qilinadigan, lekin 7+ uchun yetarli emas. "extraordinarily expensive", "subsidised by the state", "understaffed" bilan solishtiring.
• Fikr boʻlinib ketgan. "In my opinion, I think..." — "in my opinion" va "I think" ikkalasi birga ortiqcha. Faqat bittasini ishlating.
• Kompromiss tushunarsiz. "they work in their country for a few years first" — yaxshi gʻoya, lekin sababi aytilmagan. 8 inshoda: "in return for subsidised education" — kelishuvning mantiqiy asosi bor.

Nima uchun ikkinchi inshoga 8 berilgan

• Pozitsiya darhol: "I believe freedom of movement should ultimately prevail, albeit with reasonable conditions." Bir jumlada ham fikr, ham qaydlar.
• Birinchi qarashga adolatli munosabat: "a compelling argument rooted in fairness and necessity", yaʼni examiner koʻradi: muallif boshqa fikrni kamsitmaydi.
• Dalillar zanjiri: davlat oʻqitish xarajatini qoplaydi, shuning uchun "taxpayers effectively fund each graduate", natijada "brain drain" kasalxonalarni kadrsiz qoldiradi.
• Qarama-qarshi tomonning kutilmagan argumenti: "those who emigrate often remit substantial sums and return with advanced skills" — bu faqat umumiy "better life" dan ancha kuchli.
• Xulosa kirishdagi fikrga mos: "personal freedom should take precedence, ideally tempered by a fair period of initial domestic service."

Oʻzbek tilida soʻzlovchilar uchun xatolar

• ✗ They studied in Uzbekistan, so they must to work here. → ✓ They studied in Uzbekistan, so they must work here. Modal feʼldan keyin "to" yoʻq.
• ✗ Doctors should discuss about their salary. → ✓ Doctors should discuss their salary. "discuss" oʻzi toʻgʻri toʻldiruvchi oladi, "about" kerak emas. Bu xato "haqida muhokama qilish" tarjimasidan kelib chiqadi.
• ✗ Engineer who works abroad gets higher salary. → ✓ An engineer who works abroad gets a higher salary. Sanaladigan birlik ot oldida artikl shart ("an", "a"), oʻzbekchada artikl yoʻqligi sababli koʻp unutiladi.
• ✗ The government paid for their education, therefore they have to return back. → ✓ The government paid for their education, so they should return. "return back" ortiqcha ("back" takror), va "therefore" gap ichida notoʻgʻri joylashgan.
• ✗ Specialists want go abroad because of they earn more. → ✓ Specialists want to go abroad because they earn more. Ikkita xato: "to" tushib qolgan va "because of" ortidan gap kelgan.
• ✗ Brain drain is a problem for developing countries like our. → ✓ …like ours. / …like my own. Egalik olmoshi shakli: "our" ot oldida, "ours" mustaqil ishlatiladi.

Foydali leksika

• brain drain — malakali kadrlarning chet elga ketishi
• skilled professionals — malakali mutaxassislar
• to be subsidised by the state — davlat tomonidan moliyalashtirilgan boʻlish
• to give something back to society — jamiyatga qaytarish
• to remit money — pul yuborish (qaytarib yuborish)
• a shortage of qualified staff — malakali xodimlar yetishmovchiligi
• freedom of movement — koʻchish erkinligi
• to infringe on personal freedom — shaxsiy erkinlikka tajovuz qilish
• career prospects — kasbiy istiqbollar
• compulsory service — majburiy xizmat
• to return with advanced skills — yangi, yuqori malaka bilan qaytish
• to pursue opportunities abroad — chet eldagi imkoniyatlarni izlash

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