IELTS insho: benzin narxi, tirbandlik va ifloslanish — Band 6.5 va 8

Topshiriq

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

Bu ikki qismli topshiriq. Birinchi savol: benzin narxini oshirish "eng yaxshi" yechimmi, siz qay darajada rozisiz? Ikkinchi savol: boshqa qanday choralar samarali boʻlishi mumkin? Koʻp talabalar faqat birinchisiga javob beradi yoki ikkinchisini bitta jumlaga siqib qoʻyadi. Ikkala qismga ham teng, kamida bitta paragraf ajrating, aks holda "Task Response" bahosi pasayadi.

Nega 6.5, 7 emas

Namunadagi 6.5 insho ikkala savolga javob beradi, bu yaxshi. Lekin quyidagi joylar uni 7 dan ushlab turadi:

• Soddalashtirilgan sabab-oqibat. "some people will not use their cars so much because they want to save money. So maybe they will use the bus or walk instead" — "So maybe" taxminiy va sust eshitiladi. Band 8 variant: "higher prices would discourage casual or unnecessary car journeys, nudging at least some motorists towards public transport".
• Mavzuga xos soʻzlar kam. "many people really need their car" oʻrniga "driving is not a discretionary luxury but a daily necessity" deyish mumkin.
• Argument yetarlicha chuqurlashmagan. "poor people will suffer the most" yaxshi fikr, lekin bitta jumla bilan tugaydi. Uni "regressive policy" tushunchasi bilan bogʻlab, nega adolatsiz ekanini tushuntiring.
• Yechimlar roʻyxat holida. "First... Second..." — ikki chora aytilgan, ammo ular qanday ishlashi ochilmagan. "affordable, frequent and reliable" kabi aniqlovchilar fikrni boyitadi.
• Takror. "get worse and worse", "a little" kabi ifodalar oddiy darajada.

Nima uchun ikkinchi inshoga 8 berilgan

• Pozitsiya aniq va nozik: "While I accept that such a measure has some merit, I disagree that it is the best solution". "To what extent" savoliga aynan shunday javob beriladi: qisman tan olish, lekin asosiy rad.
• Birinchi tomonga adolatli yondashuv: "There is a certain logic to the petrol-pricing argument" — avval argumentning kuchli tomoni tan olinadi.
• Chuqur tanqid: "The policy is also regressive, penalising lower-income households disproportionately while scarcely altering the behaviour of the wealthy."
• Ikkinchi savolga toʻliq paragraf: "a genuinely attractive public transport network", "congestion charging in city centres", "incentives for electric vehicles" — har bir chora aniq nom bilan atalgan.
• Qoʻshma gaplar va aniqlovchilar erkin ishlatilgan, lekin ortiqcha qoʻpol emas.

Oʻzbek tilida soʻzlovchilar uchun xatolar

• ✗ The petrol price is increasing every year, so people use less cars. → ✓ Petrol prices are rising every year, so people use fewer cars. "Car" sanaladigan ot, shuning uchun "fewer" ishlatiladi, "less" emas. Oʻzbekchada "kam" ikkala holatda ham bir xil.
• ✗ Government must to build more roads. → ✓ The government must build more roads. "must" dan keyin "to" kerak emas; "government" oldidan odatda "the" qoʻyiladi.
• ✗ It depends from the price of petrol. → ✓ It depends on the price of petrol. Oʻzbekchadagi "-ga bogʻliq" / "-dan bogʻliq" aralashuvi yoki ruscha "зависит от" taʼsiri tufayli "from" xatosi uchraydi.
• ✗ Many people goes to work by car. → ✓ Many people go to work by car. "People" koʻplik, shuning uchun "go". Oʻzbek tilida bu mos kelish yoʻq, shu sababli unutiladi.
• ✗ Pollution is more worse in big cities. → ✓ Pollution is worse in big cities. "worse" allaqachon qiyosiy daraja, oldiga "more" qoʻyilmaydi.
• ✗ In big cities there is a lot of traffic jams. → ✓ In big cities there are a lot of traffic jams. "There is/are" koʻplik ot bilan moslashadi.

Foydali leksika

• traffic congestion — transport tirbandligi
• air pollution / emissions — havoning ifloslanishi / chiqindi gazlar
• public transport network — jamoat transporti tarmogʻi
• congestion charge — shahar markaziga kirish uchun toʻlov
• regressive policy — kam taʼminlanganlarga ogʻirroq tushadigan siyosat
• to discourage car use — avtomobildan foydalanishni cheklash
• cycling infrastructure — velosipedda yurish infratuzilmasi
• electric vehicles — elektromobillar
• a daily necessity — kundalik zaruriyat
• to absorb the extra cost — qoʻshimcha xarajatni koʻtarish
• fuel tax revenue — yoqilgʻi soligʻidan tushgan daromad
• a coordinated strategy — kelishilgan, kompleks strategiya

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